Creature Feature Music

YAY! I'm done with my little coffee influenced book of zombies, boils, ghouls, and dying. =D I'm so happy! Now I can go back to my closet...(copied from my twitter cause I'm to tired to write anymore)
Anyways,
This is probably the most unoriginal piece in the book. It was inspired by Creature Feature/Edward Gorey.(didn't use internet for help) I was skipping around a lot with the letters which it's not cool. =( It screws a lot of it up.(which makes it suck) But here it is:

A is for Anna who was hit with fists,

B is for Barrett who cut off her writs,

C is for Charlie was chopped with wire,

D is for Danny who caught on fire,

E is for Ed who got into a wreck,

F is for Flint fell off the deck,

G is for Gary who did too much crack,

H is for Harry whose neck just snapped,


I is for Ike who slammed his front brakes,

J is for James who was impaled by stakes,

K is for Karen crushed under a rock,

L Is for Laura who had an electric shock,

M is for Mary who never came out,

N Is for Natale who had a big pout,

O is for Odie who died of fear,

P is for Paul drank too much beer,


Q is for Quent who drowned in the ocean,

R is for Ryan who died of emotions,

S is for Susan Poisoned with bleach,

T is for Tracie who fell into a creek,

U is for Uzi was hit by a train,

V is for Velvet died of too much pain,

W is for Walter who got hit with a drill,

X is for Xeno who took too many pills,

Y is for Yuri was buried alive,

And Z is for Zim who died in a hive.

Thanks for reading,
~ Tracie

EDIT: Grammar and other mistakes. Thanks MKay923 :3

I liked it! I love any sort of creepy alphabet poems. I have a collection. :3
But can I make some grammar and like, constructive criticism?

One, when you mean extra, use "too" instead of "to."
Two, I'm guessing it should be "shock" instead of "shook."
And three, there are some extra syllables that mess with the rhyme scheme. - With Karen's line, you could take out "some," and for Gary's and Uzi's, remove the "to" part of "into."

I'm sorry I'm being such a grammar nazi. But I still really like it. (:

I was just going to fix the grammar. ^^ Thanks, And no I don't mind. Whatever helps I guess. XD
I'm moving every line 1 back so it actually rhymes in those other places. :p

I really like this! It's very good! The mostly adults concerning deaths bring nice touch to it

I showed some people my book. And they said I didn't write any of it. =( they said I "stole" it off the internet. D= My own mom and brother said so too. Even though I wrote it all by myself.
I hate it when something like this happens...

As a writer myself, I would like to read an excerpt. Is it posted somewhere? (I will offer an abbreviated segment of my book in return.)

I will post more of it when I get it on my computer. ^^

S33t! Tanx!

No problem. ^^ IT might take awhile though. =(

Tis ok! Congrats on finishing the book!!!